AREA OF FOCUS – SHOWING VS. TELLING
I wrote this short while in the Fiction course at Gardner-Webb.
When I write novels I typically write until I finish a project, then take a few weeks off before I begin something else. Depending on where my mindset it when I begin to write again, I may or may not stick with a project. This is an example of a project that I was unenthusiastic about at the time, but will eventually become a novel. Although this novel does not have a title, but simply goes by Freya , I did manage to write about ten chapters of it before I lost interest and moved on to the Not Enough Series.
I try to improve an aspect of my writing ever single time I write something new – especially when it comes to projects. I typically spot the weakness in my writing and then dedicate the project itself to really fixing the issues I’m seeing with myself. For this project, I focused my attention on how I described things. I have always struggled with showing, rather than telling. This is a weak point in my writing and I knew that if I put enough effort into correcting it, I could teach myself to describe things fuller.
Overall, I feel this section from the piece is one of my finer moments in third person descriptions. I typically reserve third person for my shorter works, since I find it allows me to write the story without needing to really feel as connected to the character as I would want to if I were working on a longer piece. Another example of where I have done this is in Honeymoon Story and in Lies Between. In general, I feel that this section exemplifies my desire to use all of the senses, while still keeping my descriptions concise. I also used this section as a practice in scattering details throughout a few pages, rather than giving direct descriptions.