AREA OF FOCUS – Repeating Words/Lines
The following poem is my first ever sestina. Although this is perhaps not my finest poem, it was my first time every writing a form poem and my first time ever attempting to repeat things in poetry. Although I think the subject matter of this poem is weak – it’s a simple poem about lost love – I do think that in it I can see where I learned to pick words choices that would be able to be repeated. I had to learn how to chose words that could be versatile and could be used in more ways than just one. I did this with certain words like “break” and “kind.” Especially with the
I had to learn how to chose words that could be versatile and could be used in more ways than just one. I did this with certain words like “break” and “kind.” Especially with the word, “kind.” With this word, I was able to use line breaks to let the word stand for both a descriptor and as a “like or as” word. Like in the section below, it can be seen that the first use of “kind” is different than the second:
he is perfect and kind
because he treats her so well. too well. she never notices
how he remembers the little things she says.
he knows she loves delicate things, but forgets she loves to see them break.
one day, when she was not watching
he handed her his heart.
because she did not know him, she believed his heart
was strong enough to withstand the kind
of title wave that blooms from watching
love fall apart without heeding the notices.
so things spiraled and cracked until they slowly began to break.
until he built a wall high enough to withstand what the world would say.
I think this works as an example of one of my first times writing poetry and it shows how I’ve grown in both my word choices and in my story telling. Although Catalina the Brave, Forgotten Fathers and Sidewalk Futures are free verse poems, I can definitely spot some growth in the way in which I phrase things and in how I describe what is happening. I also believe that my storytelling has changed since this form poem.